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Unknown Enemy: Chapter 19, Hell's Gates

Rob View Member Profile	Feb 17 2003, 06:33 AM Post #1
Unknown Enemy Group: Playtester Posts: 2,564 Joined: 25-January 02 From: US Member No.: 25	Here's Chapter 19. Let me know what you think! http://wayward.netfirms.com/ue/ue.html -------------------- -Rob

Scythe View Member Profile	Feb 17 2003, 11:10 AM Post #2
Dark Sire Group: Playtester Posts: 4,029 Joined: 25-January 02 From: Brisbane, Queensland, Australia Member No.: 46	Now that's more like it. My only complaint about the last couple chapters was the scarcity of action. I know, I know, you've gotta have plot and character development but action seems to be more enjoyable. /me chews fingers off * C'mon chapter 20! --Scythe-- -------------------- "Show me an operation that is running smoothly and I'll show you someone who's covering up mistakes. Real boats rock." - Frank Herbert PAPT Check out my game, USG. It's awesome.

Specter

Feb 17 2003, 07:24 PM

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Beast

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great work! now i get the cutted wires and the slaughterd gypsy

go on like that and more fighting

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*Aliens should have more things to evolve into like a scorpian or something that hovars without flapping.

realityisdead View Member Profile	Feb 17 2003, 07:39 PM Post #4
Employed by Raven Software after making ns_nothing Group: Playtester Posts: 1,822 Joined: 26-January 02 From: Madison, WI Member No.: 94	Again, this one is really just incredible, rob. It comes out very powerful and aggressive, a lot like the previous "wow" battles of hera. Keep it up, can't wait to read more. :) -------------------- Senior Game Designer - Raven Software For the Disfigurement of Office Furniture: www.realityisdead.com

bobthemagicalfis...

Feb 17 2003, 10:40 PM

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***SPOILER***

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Turns out that alien played right into my hands, too. Did you actually think that little�little,� Victor stumbled, trying to remember the name of the alien that jumped down the ventilation shaft.

Skulk?� Lionz said sarcastically.

�I guess you could call it that � I call �em Bobs,� Victor replied quickly. �Did you really think it was that thing that took the lights out? Please.�

heheeh i feel loved

bob the skull

*rawr*

This post has been edited by rob6264: Feb 18 2003, 12:43 AM

Rob View Member Profile	Feb 18 2003, 12:43 AM Post #6
Unknown Enemy Group: Playtester Posts: 2,564 Joined: 25-January 02 From: US Member No.: 25	Thanks all! -------------------- -Rob

Llama_Killer View Member Profile	Feb 18 2003, 01:44 PM Post #7
Dark Queen Group: Members Posts: 631 Joined: 30-July 02 From: Montreal, Canada Member No.: 1,029	YAY your my hero! Me wuvs it! i wonder if that mine trick would work in game... /me goes over to Bast DIE ONOS SCUM!!! ouch... no it dont work... -------------------- Llama Killer, spraying and praying since 2002!

Gwahir View Member Profile	Feb 18 2003, 10:51 PM Post #8
Dark Sire Group: Constellation Posts: 4,423 Joined: 25-April 02 From: Virginia, USA Member No.: 513	**spoiler** Maybe you could have them toss Victor's body at them next chapter Aside from a few tiny spelling errors (loose for lose, through for threw), well done, and thank you for turning at least one mystic happening into a logical side-plot -------------------- QUOTE Sanity is just a weird form of madness.

bobthemagicalfis...

Feb 18 2003, 11:53 PM

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Foul Beast

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Maybe you could have them toss Victor's body at them next chapter

hehe they stick expolseive in it and leave it as bait and boom all aliens die muahah

xect View Member Profile	Feb 22 2003, 01:42 AM Post #10
Dark Sire Group: Members Posts: 5,795 Joined: 24-November 02 Member No.: 9,807	Nice, real good stuff. Waiting for the 20eth. -------------------- Xect This is my hive. There are many like it, but this one is MINE.